Train in Yakima, 2011

[NancyGoodenough]

Here’s one from 2011, an old Panasonic G2 m4/3rds image I found amongst my images that looked to be fun to see what I could do to it.

I took it into Capture One, played a bit, then, because I’m moving desktops and couldn’t find my Flaming Pear license numbers for Flexify and Flood, I downloaded as trials and added their Meloncholytron to try. I got this using that software and kinda like it.

I envision adding some kind of person in the window, not sure how to yet, or what picture. Perhaps raising the blinds. Or maybe not.

I’ll put this image out for my first critique on our Forum. Many thanks.

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[NancyGoodenough]

Or, maybe just a bird on the rail.

[terry connelly]

I am enjoying the color palette and feeling of rust I get from this work. My assumption is that this is a train station somewhere. The first ? that comes to mind is why are the lower bars broken? The three areas that vie for my attention are the window and color there, the bars, and the lettering. It feels to me that each of those could be their own photo but together they don’t quite mesh for me. I am also thrown off by the angle of the lines top and bottom because of the movement I perceive on the train ? appears linear

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[NancyGoodenough]

Thanks, Terry. I can fix the top by just cloning.

My intent is that things are somehow ‘off,’ As well as it being a graphic outside the content. I thought the muted colors, probably was a sepia overlay from Meloncholytron software, helped tie it together. I thought it could standalone without a gimmick of face or fowl, but still would like to try that. Thanks for the valuable feedback.

 

[Steve Muench]

My unrefined take on a bit ‘off’:

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[NancyGoodenough]

A quite interesting take, SteveM. I love the shadows as that’s the sort of thing I had in mind. Gives it a subject and reason for being IMO. Many thanks for showing your take. I may go for a couple of shadows, one of which is holding a knife. Color Noir, which I know is an oxymoron.

Angle is also quite interesting. Right up my alley too.

Color change, will think about, but probably in the same alley!! n

P.S. Yes! This is what I envisioned for the Critique on the Forum. Thank you, Terry and the Steves for making this work! n

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[Steve Muench]

I wonder if it wouldn’t be too difficult to add a slight motion blur to the train, but not to the stationary railing. Perhaps isolating the railing on a separate layer and compositing it over the speed-blurred image.

[NancyGoodenough]

That’s an interesting idea, Steve.

[terry connelly]

It is interesting how adding a subject gave this so much more interest and impact. Something to keep in mind going forward.

 

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